While my eyes zipped over the A1 section, the article “School Chief Takes on Tenure” grabbed my attention. I’ve been spending time at Stratham Memorial School lately (as an Education minor), and teacher tenure is always a hot point of controversy.
The lead-which was a little bit lackluster- didn’t really hook readers, many of which wouldn’t find a story about Michelle Rhee (you may be wondering, who is she again?!) very compelling. The lead is also very long … “Michelle Rhee, the hard-charging chancellor of the Washington public schools, thinks teacher tenure may be great for adults, those who go into teaching to get summer vacations and….. on an on an on!
The story rebounds in the next few paragraphs, narrowing in on Ms. Rhee’s radical $40,000 proposal for teachers to give up tenure. The fifth paragraph really gets at the bulk of reader’s questions- like Rhee’s current effort to rid ineffective teachers, the lack of union support, and the potential for a ‘wrenching’ labor struggle.
The rest of the article is organized well; there isn’t a strong sense of a story -within -a -story here. The points pan out like this:
Ø Explain who is this ‘School Chief’ (Michelle Rhee)
Ø What is her proposal (how much $ in proposed raises)
Ø Union response/ possible drawbacks
Ø Limitations under her proposal
I was also interested to learn the severity of Rhee’s proposal for labor strikes, and I was left wondering what the Teacher’s Union is likely to do, seeing as their quite divided now.
The lead-which was a little bit lackluster- didn’t really hook readers, many of which wouldn’t find a story about Michelle Rhee (you may be wondering, who is she again?!) very compelling. The lead is also very long … “Michelle Rhee, the hard-charging chancellor of the Washington public schools, thinks teacher tenure may be great for adults, those who go into teaching to get summer vacations and….. on an on an on!
The story rebounds in the next few paragraphs, narrowing in on Ms. Rhee’s radical $40,000 proposal for teachers to give up tenure. The fifth paragraph really gets at the bulk of reader’s questions- like Rhee’s current effort to rid ineffective teachers, the lack of union support, and the potential for a ‘wrenching’ labor struggle.
The rest of the article is organized well; there isn’t a strong sense of a story -within -a -story here. The points pan out like this:
Ø Explain who is this ‘School Chief’ (Michelle Rhee)
Ø What is her proposal (how much $ in proposed raises)
Ø Union response/ possible drawbacks
Ø Limitations under her proposal
I was also interested to learn the severity of Rhee’s proposal for labor strikes, and I was left wondering what the Teacher’s Union is likely to do, seeing as their quite divided now.
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